I believe the feedback I received was
very helpful. I was not surprised at all by the comments and I incorporated the
suggestions into my new video. The two
comments were both very different in nature so that was great. One was to go
into more detail about the spa facility and the other was to move around a
little more in my video.
**My dogs decided to play in the middle of the video....think of it as sound effects for my dog resort :)**
Hey Danielle,
ReplyDeleteYou seem very confident in your delivery, and you have good movement to go with your words, which creates a impactful elevator pitch. I found the comments and feedback that I received on my first pitch to be beneficial as well, and I worked to incorporate their suggestions into my second attempt. I also loved the dogs in the video and I think it was pretty fitting given what your business opportunity is. Overall, I would say nice improvement between pitch one and pitch two, and with a little bit more practice, pitch three will be your best one yet. Nice job!
Hey Danielle,
ReplyDeleteI thought your elevator pitch was great. You displayed your information in confident manner, and it really made me buy into what you were pitching. I think that the more feed back you receive the better each pitch gets. You displayed your information great, but could relate to your target market a little more.
Danielle,
ReplyDeleteAs a Theatre major where performance and delivery of speech are so pivotal to my career, I thought your pitch was very well rehearsed. The delivery felt very natural. Sometimes people will tend to speed up their natural speech cadence when they are nervous or ill prepared. That was not present throughout the duration of your pitch. I think as you continue to work on this pitch throughout the remainder of the semester you will make even more improvement as you perform this pitch for a third time.
Danielle,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a great presentation. I remember your first elevator pitch and belive you improved greatly on this one. You definitely delivered this one greatly your confidence definitely shows and it makes your pitch sound much better. I hope you can pursue this idea Danielle. Its a great idea and good luck with it.